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To Be Or Not To Be

If it’s all about the doing
What you say, hear and see
How about a tad more of it
Being about the be

For ‘I am‘ is what’s important
To obtain consistency
A deeper self-awareness
That expresses you from me

As much as ‘you are‘ also
Unique in your own way
To find your inner sanctum
That’s ‘to be‘ day after day

And so in the midst of chaos
To be 
Is at the end the only thing
That will set each heart free

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Comments on: "To Be Or Not To Be" (13)

  1. What was the question? The indecision of Hamlet’s leads him to be ineffective, and ultimately (in pretty short order) for him not to be. Discuss.

    I like the way you have interwoven this – it made me re-read it and think over it – it has depth G:)

    • Thank you. I’m still re-reading it as it was one of those compelling poems that was in my heart and head that I possibly still don’t fully understand. The depth is in the challenge m’thinks to try and grapple with it maybe? 🙂

      • My only thought on a possible change was in the third last line where ‘to be’ is positive (present) and ‘not to be’ is negative (absent). – a more positive ending could be achieved by deleting the negative – if that makes sense. Just a thought G;)

      • Yes agreed – I think it would read better and link with the first stanza if it read ‘to focus on ‘to be” or maybe ‘to focus on the ‘be” . 🙂

  2. If you had

    ‘To be’

    As the third last line it would be short, but, it would thus emphasises the missing ‘or not to be’ leaving it (there or) not there. G:)

    • Ooo yes – I like that! It will surprise ‘Broca’ by breaking the symmetry for that line and like you say add impact whilst creating a more positive ending. Thank you so much 🙂

  3. Reblogged this on Graeme Sandford and commented:
    What do you think ( or not think) abou this thoughtful piece? G:)

    • Thanks for re-blogging this.

      • YVW – I’m not very good at it; but, sometimes it is best to spend time and thought and focus time to work on a really good poem and get it perfect – they deserve the extra effort IMO G:)

      • Absolutely – I’m glad I put this one out there though because with your kind help it’s been crafted into a much better work than I could have done by myself. That’s the joy of these platforms don’t you think? Plus the fact I’m now intrigued by what Hanger Farm Poets is all about?

      • It is good to offer support of a tangible nature ( I tend to post far too much) and I used to frequent EditRed back in the day where poets and story-writers did a lot of helpful critiquing – I learnt from my peers and from a number of very talented people that just enjoyed writing and encouraging others in their efforts – HFPs is a local (to me) poetry group where we just read our (and our favourite poets’) poems to some like-minded souls – we are mainly ancients and it is a bit of fun.

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